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maybe you should describe your experience. Don't state exactly what happened, you have to describe what happened.

something like..."having lost my eyesight, my other 4 senses now brimmed with action. I struggled to find my fork, but decided to use my hands instead. I have thought much about the texture of my food before, but it ..."

limit the state-of-being verbs. Those are bad.

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