[size=1]GRAMMATICAL REVISIONS OF VERSION 4 : KARAKUSA TOWN
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[Karakusa Town - After Team Plasma / N Battle]
Dialog editting: left column is the current v4 NPC dialog, on the right is my proposed edit.
C U R R E N T | P R O P O S E D
Girl: "I think having a bag is helpful, | "I think having a bag is helpful,
especially when you have a lot | especially when you have a lot
It suits a person like me! | to carry! It suits a person
__________________________" | like me!"
Boy: "Pokemon are really cool! | "Pokemon are really cool!
Anyone who thinks its not are lame. | Anyone who thinks they aren't
I got a Charizard card would | is lame. I've got a Charizard
you like to trade? | card, do you want to trade?
What? You don't collect cards...?" | What?! You don't collect cards...?"
Boy: "Do you know me? | "Do you know me?
Of course you do, I'm the | Of course you do, I'm the best
best Pokemon Trainer! | Pokemon Trainer in the world!"
Woman: "Route 2 has some tough trainers, | "Route 2 has some tough trainers,
if you're heading that way be careful, | If you're heading that way, be
They wont take it easy!" | careful. They won't take it easy on you!"
Woman: "Did you know Pokemon with items | "Did you know Pokemon holding
can evolve by trade? | certain items can evolve when
I think its odd!" | traded? I think that's odd!"
Kid: "There are 8 Gym Badges in the | "There are 8 Gym Badges from the
Isshu region | Isshu region, and you have to
You have to collect them all, | collect all of them, or else you
or else won't be able | won't be able to challenge
to challenge the Elite Four!" | the Elite Four!"
Boy: "I want a gameboy | "I want a GameBoy! ...I've been
I've wanted one for 15 years! | wanting one for over 15 years!
But all I got is a PS3!" | All I've got is this PS3..."
Boy: "Oh? | "What's that?...
I don't speak English well | I no speak English good, so
I speak mostly Kanji!" | I speak mostly Kanji!"
Woman: "Listen! Your Pokemon will grow | "Listen up! Your Pokemon will grow
through battles, but keep this in mind... | through battles, but don't forget...
You must care of them when they get tired. | You must care for them when they tire.
Pokemon need plenty of care." | Pokemon need plenty of care!"
Girl: "People say that people that use | "Some say that those who use strategy
strategy usually win. | will usually win the battle.
Like the Elite Four... | Like the Elite Four...
They have trained for several years | They've trained for several years
and their efforts show! | and look where it's gotten them!
In a way I'm jealous... | In some ways, I'm jealous of them.
Ah, well." | Ah, well..."
Boy: "That girl over there always talks | "That girl over there always talks
about how good people are. | about how good other people are.
It's almost as though she doesn't | It's almost as though she doesn't
?If I cheer her up she'll | realize how great she is, herself.
date me..." | I'd really like to be with her..."
Drummer:"Want to hear me play bass? | "Want to hear me play the drums?
I'm new to this, | Just so you know... I'm new to
so don't judge me!!" | this, so don't judge me!"[/size]
Note that I don't have CharMap on my Netbook, so I can't get the accented "e" for Pokemon. These are, of course, just my suggested changes. I basically continued from my last post of things that weren't translated, but it turns out that all that was left of Karakusa Town was (somewhat minor) grammatical errors. Hope this helps!