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Raguto

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  1. Words 9: Shouldn't it be continuous.

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    Words 10: The N in intentions.

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    Words 11: the R in Through.

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    Words 12: She says Pokemon are really cool! 'Anyone who thinks "its" not are lame' Should be Anyone who thinks they aren't is lame.

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    Words 13: I put this 1 because I noticed a few others spots were "Ishu" and I didn't catch them so I thought at first Ishu was right and not Isshu.

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    Words 14: Should add a 'You' in there. Or else you won't be able.

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    Words 15: Departement should be Department.

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    Words 16: YOOTERII description on the What'

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    Sorry for bad quality ;)

  2. Good Work also,

    in Pokemon White a few things.

    Words

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    Words 2: Like Silent Storm said maybe change fight to have or do.

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    Words 3: Maybe make it say see, When I first read that I didn't understand it at first I guess I just don't think it's necessary.

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    Words 4: Maybe make it say "It's not like I didn't want POKABU from the start anyway." - Add It's.

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    Words 5: Our "guys" ??? What about Our Pokemon.

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    Words 6 More cut off words.

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    Words 7 More cut off words.

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    Words 8 No space after the comma I'm not entirely sure.

    http://i53.tinypic.com/2wd6654.jpg

    Thanks to my friend for pointing these out.

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